Dear Teacher:
I’m glad to be your student, and I am very happy to learn the course I like best under your help.
English is an important tool, through which we can share it with the world. I treasure the chance of learning English, and I enjoy the happiness from this course.
This Thursday is Thanksgiving Day. On this special day, I want to express my deepest thanks to you!
Yours sincerely,
Jane
DearMs. Fu,
Iwould like you to know that I appreciate the help and support you gave to mewhen I was in junior high school. I enjoyed being taught by you immensely. Youare an excellent teacher and inspired me to continue learning with an open andpositive mind.
Iwould like to convey my heartfelt gratitude to you for teaching me what is responsibility. You helped me how to find the best place for myself and look forthe personal values. I remember you gave me a book as a present of the SpringFestival. You are the first teacher who gave me a present which I was moved fora long time.
Iwould further say that you gave me so good memories that I wish I could go backto that time again. It was you who encouraged me to overcome obstacles. It wasyou who cared about my emotions. I appreciate all you have done for me, whichmeant so much to me. I hope that this letter brings my best wishes to you and Ionce again thank you for giving me those precious memories of my life, which Ishall cherish forever.
Sincerely yours,
Yang
【本期题目】
在初中三年的学习生活中,你一定遇到过很多老师,现在请你选择其中对你帮助最大的一位老师,给他(她)写一封感谢信,谈谈你对他(她)的印象,回忆一下他(她)是怎么帮助你的,并表达你对他(她)的祝福。信的开头和落款已给出,不计词数。
提示词:kind, help, encourage, thanks, hope
【写作指导】
本题要求我们给对自己帮助最大的老师写一封感谢信,因为是自己亲身经历的,又是写给自己的老师,同学们一定有千言万语要对他(她)说。在情真意切的同时,我们还要格外注意文章的详略和条理。
通过审题,我们可以获知:
1. 文章的主题:感谢师恩
2. 文章的要点:对老师的感谢之情,对老师的印象,回忆老师的帮助,并表达祝福。
3. 文章的体裁:书信
4. 文章的人称:you, i
5. 文章的时态:因为是回忆,所以以一般过去时为主。
同学们先把相关短语和词汇整理一下:
1. 描写老师的形容词有哪些呢?
kind, nice, selfless, patient, easy-going, responsible, be strict with…
2. 有哪些单词和短语可以表示老师对自己的帮助呢?
help me with my english/ maths, explain…to me patiently, encourage me never to give up, praise me when i make progress, have a talk with me, take me to the hospital when i am ill, tell me some good ways to learn……
接下来,我们看看如何表达对老师的'感谢和祝福吧。
1. i want to say thanks/thank you.
2. i owe my progress/success to your help.
3. i owe you a lot for your help/what you’ve done for me.
4. i’ll never forget your help and i will remember all the happy times we shared together.
5. i hope you can be happy/healthy, forever.
6. i wish you good luck/health!
【普通作文】
dear miss wang:
i’m glad to write to you.
you are such a kind and easy-going teacher that we all like you. i remember that at first i hated learning new english words very much and i even wanted to give up. when you noticed this, you had a talk with me. you told me some good ways to remember those words and encouraged me never to give up. i’ve made great progress in english and now i’m a top student in english.
i want to say thanks. i will work harder in the future. i hope you can be happy and healthy forever.
yours,
linda
点评:
本文信息点齐全,层次比较清楚,语言比较通顺,句式也有一定的变化。作者首先用一个so…that 句式将老师随和、善良的特点勾勒出来,接下来回忆了老师是如何在自己当初因讨厌背单词而想放弃学英语时对自己无私的帮助。结尾处,对于老师的感谢和祝福也就水到渠成,感情真挚、自然。
当然,文章的连贯和语言优化方面也还是可以进一步改进的。
【满分范文】
dear miss wang,
i’m glad to write to you. at this moment, words can no longer express my feelings.
how kind and responsible can a teacher be? you just gave me the perfect answer. i can clearly remember how much i hated learning new english words at first. to be honest, i really wanted to give up. as soon as you noticed this, you offered to help me by telling me some shortcuts to learn them. you never failed to encourage me even when i made only a little progress. little by little, my interest in english grew and now i’m a top student in english.
i want to say thanks to you. i will work harder in the future to live up to your expectations. i hope you can be happy and healthy forever.
yours
xiaoming
点评:
这篇修改后的作文无论在语言表达以及文章内涵方面都是相当优秀的。
首先,开头at this moment, words can no longer express my feelings. 短短的一句话便把作者此时的激动和对老师的感激之情表达得很充分。第二段首句的设问句how kind and responsible can a teacher be? 更是精彩。在描写自己起初对英语单词的厌烦时,作者用了一个how 所引导的宾语从句替代原文的普通句式。
文章的几个过渡语也是恰到好处: to be honest, little by little等,均在一定程度上增强了文章的连贯性。此外,几个表达法也相当地道、出彩,比如用 live up to one’s expectations (不辜负某人的期望)表示自己的决心,使得整篇文章的感情更加饱满、真挚,给人留下了深刻的印象。
Dear teacher ,
I am writing to you to express my thanks for your help in learning English and speaking English.
During these days in your class, I have learned much from you and it is very helpful to me. Firstly, you let me know what is the west thinking patternstraight thinking pattern. And, I think, it is very important to understand the wests thoughts. As you know, this can help me with my examination and interaction with foreigners. Secondly, I have got enough confidence in speaking in English from your class and it took me a long time to gain this confidence. Now, I always express my ideas in English as possible as I can. Its great to do that. The last not the least, I find that learning English is not an boring thing as before and Im interested in studying English which was just a necessary task to pass examinations. Reading, listening or speaking all become interesting and I really enjoy it.
Above all, I want to say thanks again to you. And thank you for your time.
Good luck!
your student:
xx年x月x日
Dear teacher:
hello!
Pen, full of words like a flood in my heart, dont know where to start. That you give us the deepest impression of your words and deeds left our best memories.
Time flies, unconsciously, the teacher you have to accompany the time we spent almost a year, this year, we have to say no to you out of gratitude.
Come to the first lesson of the university, is your English class. In our eyes, your kind, no vehemently enforcement. Your class, I feel no pressure and tension. Not only learning in class, after class, you are also very concerned about to us. Whenever we meet with difficulties, you are always thinking about new ways to help us, teach us; When our mood depressed, you will take the initiative to clean our struggle, you have confidence in our future.
Although the teacher you often mention their own children in class, in our hearts, you are not only our English teacher, is more like a great mother.
Your class, I cant pick out any problem, you use your unique way of teaching to us in every class, both humorous and vivid.In the coming days, we will be more efforts to study, with the most excellent grades in return for your sweat, return school and society.To the dead silk side, ended.candles burn, you the silkworm spirit however we respect, thank you, teacher.Thousands of words, express thanks to you.
Finally wish the teacher:
Healthy body, a happy family,
Happy every day.
your student:
xx年x月x日
亲爱的王老师:
我写信是想诚挚的感谢你在我学习上的帮助。没有你的帮助,我的成绩就不会排在班级前三名。是你在我失败的时候一直支持我。我帮我指出错误并告诉我怎样改正它们。你总是不知疲倦地训练我的耐心。你不断的鼓励是我最大的动力。
我真心祝愿您身体健康,永远快乐。另外,我希望你能多注意你的健康,多多休息。
再次感谢你的帮助!
你的学生
李丽
Dear teacher:
I am writing to you to express my thanks for your help in learning English and speaking English.
During these days in your class, I have learned much from you and it is very helpful to me. Firstly, you let me know what is the west thinking patternstraight thinking pattern. And, I think, it is very important to understand the wests thoughts. As you know, this can help me with my examination and interaction with foreigners. Secondly, I have got enough confidence in speaking in English from your class and it took me a long time to gain this confidence.
Now, I always express my ideas in English as possible as I can. Its great to do that. The last not the least, I find that learning English is not an boring thing as before and Im interested in studying English which was just a necessary task to pass examinations. Reading, listening or speaking all become interesting and I really enjoy it.
Above all, I want to say thanks again to you. And thank you for your time.
Good luck!
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